R+P Post 9: Our script

Lola: What the f*ck!
Marlon: Oh, Lola
Lola: Who the f*ck is this?
Marlon: What are you talking about?
Lola: Don't try that shit with me
Marlon: Chill out!

This is what the characters will be shouting at each other, yet the music over the top will be too loud for the words to actually be audible and so the audience will only slightly hear what they're saying - the emphasis is more on the moving of their mouths and to draw attention to the fact they are having an argument. During this, we might add a slow motion effect to dramatise the situation a bit more, and also to ensure that the words aren't completely audible. The use of strong language, we thought, was appropriate because it's realistic to how teenagers talk and highlights Lola's anger and her lack of control over her words and actions when she is drunk/on drugs (therefore presenting these substances in a negative light).

After our rough cut, we decided to change the script in order to make it simpler to shoot and easier for us to edit the continuity successfully, as the shot/reverse/shot didn't work and the slap didn't look realistic. We also decided to take the sound of the speech out completely so that it's just their lips moving as the words sounded odd under the music.

Updated script:

Marlon: Oh Lola
Lola: What the hell!